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Sample #1


Original
Amanda said we had to hurry, so I tried to run but stumbled and fell off the platform. The last thing I remember seeing was the train track coming right toward my head. Then the world went black. Way in the distance I could hear Amanda screaming. Then a rumbling sound got louder and louder. Suddenly, just when the rumbling was the loudest, I felt my body ascending. I felt warm and I remember it all. I remembered thinking, Did Amanda succeed?

Edited
Amanda said we had to hurry, so I tried to run but stumbled and fell off the platform. I saw the train track coming right toward my head. Then a rumbling sound got louder and louder. Way in the distance, I could hear Amanda screaming. Suddenly, just when the rumbling was the loudest, I felt my body ascending. I felt warm, and I remember thinking, Did Amanda succeed? Then the world went black.

Sample #2

Original
I started the water to brush my teeth and glanced into the mirror. I suddenly realized what trendy meant. The pajamas were orange and purple! And they barely looked like pajamas. I look more like someone getting ready to model a tread mill or a pair of sneakers! These clothes did not look like they promote a restful night’s sleep, they looked as though I was training for a triathalon! Did Amanda mistake the mattress as a wrestling mat? I missed my old sleepy pajamas that were familiar with my routine.

Edit
I started the water to brush my teeth and glanced into the mirror. I suddenly realized what “trendy” meant. The pajamas were orange and purple. I looked more like someone getting ready to model a treadmill or a pair of sneakers, or train for a triathlon! I missed my old, sleepy pajamas that matched my routine.

 

 

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